Mystic Guilden
13 years ago
Sun Oct 17 2010, 09:53pm
Mystic Guilden
Mage
This is a poem I wrote to get something off my chest. It's not particularly articulate or well directed, but it certainly let me pour out some of my anger simply by writing it :)
Heaven and Hell
I’m sure I know the secret,
I think I’ve learnt it well.
There is no Heaven above us,
Below us there is no Hell.
Take a longer look at the world,
And maybe you will see,
That these places aren’t on a physical plane,
But they exist in you and me.
Heaven is in our capacity to love,
It’s in each unselfish act,
It thrives on our compassion,
And doesn’t expect anything back.
Hell is greed and malice,
Violence in equal measure,
It’s in the desire to maim and hurt,
And thrives in violent pleasure.
Do I know the secret?
Have I learnt it well?
If so, then why are my actions,
Leading me away from heaven,
And straight toward my hell?
That's so cool! I love it! I don't think it is particularly inarticulate or poorly directed Ariadne, it flows quite well. The only thing i picked up on was the "these places aren't on a physical plain" part. I think you may mean "plane" instead?? Other than that, i think the concept is brilliant and so true!
Mystic Guilden
13 years ago
Mystic Guilden
Mage
Thanks Thandi. I've fixed up 'plane'. I intended to correct it before I posted then completely forgot when I adjusted the last line :P
Mystic Ward
13 years ago
Mystic Ward
Twentyfamilies Gypsy
You need to add an 'n' to violet as well I think. Glad it helped you.
Very powerful ariadne! love the way it is almost a musing of life! :)
Mystic Guilden
12 years ago
Thu Jul 21 2011, 02:25pm
Mystic Guilden
Mage
I'm in the middle of a Huge, nay, EPIC!! clean out of my room, and came across this poem I scribbled down during a bored moment at highschool. I never fail to be amazed at some of the things I've come up with when I'm not trying (and the failure that comes when I do try :P ;) )
Here it is, exactly as it was written up the loose leaf page 7 years ago (except for the scribbled out line about psychology, because I couldn't come up with a good rhyming word XD )
Kirsty's Poem (29-3-04, English Class)
I'll tell you a story about one stressful day,
When absolutely nothing would go my way.
The Health SAC was stressful, I must confess,
And my English essay is a total mess!
Thank god for lunch and a bit of a break.
I'll study in fourth period if I can stay awake.
My mind is now ticking at a mile a minute,
This poem would be good if I could get with it.
At three-twenty I can say for sure,
I'm going to sprint out my homeroom door.
I can't wait to get home and lay on my bed,
And finally get the chance to rest my poor head!
Mystic Ward
12 years ago
Mystic Ward
Twentyfamilies Gypsy
lol Ari that's wonderful.
Mystic Guilden
12 years ago
Mystic Guilden
Mage
A hurried arrangement of a half formed idea :)
More than Meets the Eye-
There’s more to me than meets the eye,
So beware of what lies beneath,
For a smile hides pain
Laughter hides shame,
And malice is a quick downturn of lips.
There’s more to me than meets the eye,
So don’t block out my voice,
For a lecture hides love,
Cursing hides fear,
And kindness is a quick flash of smile.
Mystic Guilden
12 years ago
Mystic Guilden
Mage
Just when I think I've lost my ability to pen a poem [act]Wham![/act] rhyming words. And while I am very aware that poems don't need to rhyme, mine seem to work better that way :P
This one started out as a single line, and after repeating it ten times, then writing it down, the rest wrote itself, meaning and all.
One Deadly Sin
It starts with a curse,
And ends with a cry,
It shatters the truth,
And bends a lie,
It gives you an enemy,
And takes away a friend,
It has a subtle beginning,
And an ambiguous end,
It feeds on malice,
And devours shame,
It inflames your known weaknesses,
And the ones you cannot name,
It slumbers within you,
And awakens outside,
It’s not fear or loathing,
And definitely not pride.
It’s colour is green,
And has a grip dark as night,
It’s Jealousy,
And it’s Envy,
One more Deadly Sin to fight.
Wow.... I can't explain how amazing that is. And so true as well. Well done. :)
Wow! It's brilliant Ariadne! Very true, I love it.
Beautifully written, Ariadne.