Hey Guys,
Since I'm not very good at my grammar and spelling (I'm sure some of you are) I was wondering whether a couple of you would like to profreed my work. I have all sorts of work. So, any volunteers? Please comment below and I'll pm you the work.
Thanks ;D
VioletCrumble
Ohh yes please. I love proofreading and editing. ;D
Okay, you two. I'll pm you what I want you to proofread. Don't be alamared it is long.
Mystic Ward
14 years ago
Mystic Ward
Twentyfamilies Gypsy
I'm always happy to help out with editing and proofreading. I'm not an expert mind.
lol Deb. I don't think anyone really knows the ins and outs of editing and proofreading. If it sounds good then that usually does it.
I've just send you a pm Jelli, Deb and Axe. Any suggestions or proofreading you can do would be appreciated. If you have any queries just pm me.
Thanks again,
VC :D
hey, i'll volunteer for proofreading if you need anymore. my friends think i need some to do because i'm now reading their school diaries and editing that |:|
I'll keep you in mind Shadowchild. ;D But for the moment I have no work that needs to be proofread. Thanks for the offer though. :D
13 years ago
Wed Aug 04 2010, 07:36pm
I need some help finding a poem! ;D If you know of any good poems that talk about women and marginlise men but still have a lot of poetic devices in them can you please pm me the details asap. If you would like any more details about the sort of poem please also ask below or you can pm me.
There is Carol Anne Duffy, but her themes are marginilised women, not men.
Georg Trakl has some a little more appropriate but he is a german poet, so translations can loose a lot of the poetic devices.
Sorry I didn't make it very clear that the poet must be Australian. Even if you know about any poems that talk positively about aboriginals that'd be good.
Thanks for everyone's sugestions. I have found a poem. :D
I am currently trying to write a short story for my english assignment and was wondering whether if I put up my ideas people can comment on it and give me suggestions. I'll also put up details about my main character. The short story has to be 600 - 1000 words so not that long.
Sure we will have a look.
Just out of curiosity, what poem did you end up using?
I ended up finding an poetry anthology and the poem was called This Version of Love by Dorothy Hewett. You can't find the poem on the internet.
13 years ago
Sun Mar 06 2011, 02:01pm
Shadows is the name of the short story. Just be aware some people might find it a bit scary.
The story is not finished and I still have to do the ending. Thoughts? Improvements? Queries????
thanks for the feedack. I've actually changed a bit of it. :)
13 years ago
Sun Mar 06 2011, 02:02pm
Now... here is it. I;m still editing it. Any suggestions would be appreciated.
Dreamweavers' Guilden
13 years ago
Dreamweavers' Guilden
Rebel
Thats really good VC! One thing I do need to point out though, this line: pants; he wore twenty-five years earlier You really might want to write it like this: pants; The same he wore twenty-five years earlier Just to make it flow better?
Sounds really good though VC :)
thanks for the feedback Bambi. Since I posted that one up again. I've actually changed it. I'm actually thinking of entering it into a writing competiton even though it was for a school assignment. That is if I get a good mark of course.
12 years ago
Sun Jun 12 2011, 01:49pm
Hey Guys.
I was wondering whether one of you would be able to read my english essay and tell me what suggestions, improvements etc. you have.
I don't need this to be proofread anymore. :)
Mystic Ward
12 years ago
Mystic Ward
Twentyfamilies Gypsy
nsecurity and lack of conscience, needs a comma
cajoled her husband cajoles change of tense
who are the murderers? assassins assassinate and murderers murder. I'd either name the murderers or change the words.
Macbeth utilised utilises change of tense. There is a bit of this throughout so have another look though and change them to one or another. past or present, not both.
Macbeth utilised his supremacy over the two murders, to assassinate Banquo and Macduff’s family, in a bid to saviour his Kingship. I'd ditch this sentence, the following one says the same thing in a better way.
outcomes to retain his crown. retaining
Macbeth and merely reveal. I'd delete 'merely'
feminist feminine
over Macbeth, of macbeth
without her natural the instead of 'her'
Furthermore, Lady Macbeth’s unquenchable desire for royal authority led her to manipulate Macbeth, by repeatedly questioning his masculinity and belittling his self-esteem, to goad him to commit regicide. again this is a repeated sentence.
her ruthfulness personality... ruthless
Lady Macbeth exploits her authority over her husband, Macbeth, don't need to use macbeth, we know who her husband is.
which resultantly had a detrimental impact on Macbeth’s physical and mental well-being. I'd delete resultantly
hope that helps.;)
