u have a writing mentor? no fair! My english studies teacher is old and icky!
lol. My English teacher is old and icky too!! [img]http://s3.images.proboards.com/grin.gif" alt=";D" border="0"/>
freaaaaaaky [img]http://s3.images.proboards.com/cheesy.gif" alt=":D" border="0"/>
Hmm ur stuff is definitely gettin better, claire, yay claire!!!
lovezit! [img]http://s3.images.proboards.com/tongue.gif" alt=":P" border="0"/>
Thankyou!!!!!!
I focuss more when I'm writing now because my writing mentor says I'm a bit messy with my words.
But thankyou heaps!!!! [img]http://s3.images.proboards.com/grin.gif" alt=";D" border="0"/>
yeah its a lot...tidier [img]http://s3.images.proboards.com/smiley.gif" alt=":)" border="0"/>
Thanking you!!!!! [img]http://s3.images.proboards.com/grin.gif" alt=";D" border="0"/>
A short one, pretty crappy, but I'm suppoesed to be packing cups!!
Hold on
I'm holding very tight
the wind it breaks my wings.
They sail far across the hills and far across the sea.
I lay myself to sleep
in this river that's so deep.
The villages go by, Its so sad that I weep.
I hold my breath
one last time.
And watch the smiles go by.
Then I cry into slumber, and I lay myself to sleep.
"I hold my breath
one last time.
And watch the smiles go by."
I like how u say "the smiles go by" rather than people...its so profound! [img]http://s3.images.proboards.com/tongue.gif" alt=":P" border="0"/>
Thankyou!!!!!
*is now super happy*
*sighs*
But now I've got to pack again!! [img]http://s3.images.proboards.com/tongue.gif" alt=":P" border="0"/>
memory
i'm guided by the wind
as i spead my open wings.
i sail into the nigh
as only an eagle can fly.
i'm fluttered by the sense
of the feeling i'm opressed......
i'm so depressed i cannot fly
so high up on my wings.
i give and give
take and take back
but what do i get in return?
i get the sense that i'm overrunned and i'll never see the end.
u like usin a lot of bird metaphors dont ya kaylan? hehe [img]http://s3.images.proboards.com/smiley.gif" alt=":)" border="0"/>
omg i love ur siggie by the way [img]http://s3.images.proboards.com/smiley.gif" alt=":)" border="0"/>
Shadow of a nightsong
I'm in a shadow
lost of joy
cornered by grief
dispelled of evil.
Fallen from grace
missplaced my place
in life
and in death.
Let me lie
in the shadow
corrupted my evil
called by my own name.
Called for a reason
I cannot inagine.
Called by the Nightsong
flying through the night.
Hold my arm
feel it bleed.
Taste the pain
that you see.
I dont know why
I'm alone.
You keep asking me.
So I'll hold my head up high
as I feel my heart grow tight.
I'll not scream as my wrists do bleed
as I hurt in the dead of the night.
Open your ears
hear a scream.
Rip up the tear
undo the seam.
I cant keep
telling myself.
That my blood is only in my dreams.
Hear the words
that I scream.
Feel the pain
of the dream.
I know why
I hurt myself.
It's because no one seems to care.
So I'll hold my head up high
as I feel my heart grow tight.
I'll not scream as my wrists do bleed
as I hurt in the dead of the night.
And I, I'll feel my wrists go numb,
and I'll feel the emptiness.
Oh, and I, I'll call into he darkness
that screams out my name.
So I'll hold my head up high
as I feel my heart grow tight.
I'll not scream as my wrists do bleed
as I hurt in the dead of the night.
How do i scream?
How do I scream
if my mouth is
sewn shut?
How do I bleed
if my heartis
inside out?
I can't believe
that you would see
what I don't want you too.
So just close your eyes, and shut the door.
And hold your breath.
I'm withered inside.
And I'm screaming out for a place to hide.
Oh I'm scathed on the inside
but you don't see, you don't cry for me.
How can I sleep
when my dreams are
immobilising me.
And how do I scream
out to your voice
when the pain the pain is rging inside?
Our hearts collide
they'rethrown apat.
Your heart is mended
but is dead.
My screams are weak
and you don't care.
Because your life
is eating you inside.
I'm withered inside.
And I'm screaming out for a place to hide.
Oh I'm scathed on the inside
but you don't see, you don't cry for me.
And my future is bleak,
beacaue I'm not there
I'm not there.
"I'm withered inside.
And I'm screaming out for a place to hide.
Oh I'm scathed on the inside
but you don't see, you don't cry for me.
And my future is bleak,
beacaue I'm not there
I'm not there."
Ditto matey, ditto [img]http://s3.images.proboards.com/tongue.gif" alt=":P" border="0"/>
thanking you!!!!!!!!!!!
I rather like that bit too - so did everyone on vampire freaks.com!!!!
Hey, this is a song that I wrote.
Lady of the snow
I scream out for you,
when its raining.
The shrounds of snow fall on my head,
its like a painting.
Coda - the withered flower calls my name
and I see my reflection...
on the petals withered with age
but my hearts not perfection.....
chorus - Oh lady of the snow
won't you let you let me go?
My heart is bleak, its put on a show
but i'm too lost to know.....
Caught in fire that's burnt me down,
its like a river flowing through
a shroud of snow that melting me away....
still lost till this day.
I try to fix whats undone,
but its too lost to find now.
Immortilsed inside my dreams,
its the calling of the crow.
Coda - the withered flower calls my name
and I see my reflection...
on the petals withered with age
but my hearts not perfection.....
chorus - Oh lady of the snow
won't you let you let me go?
My heart is bleak, its put on a show
but i'm too lost to know.....
Caught in fire that's burnt me down,
its like a river flowing through
a shroud of snow that melting me away....
still lost 'till this day
And my heart is melting now
the fire can't burn out.
I am tied to a stake of doubt,
and I can't wriggle out.....
of the ties that hold me down
i think i'm gonna drown.....
drown in the depths of my despair,
oh wont you hold my hand?
chorus - Oh lady of the snow
won't you let you let me go?
My heart is bleak, its put on a show
but i'm too lost to know.....
Caught in fire that's burnt me down,
its like a river flowing through
a shroud of snow that melting me away....
still lost 'till this day
Just a song i wrote.
Take my hand
I slowely drag a slither of a knife
i'm just so cold, just wanna end this life.
I close my eyes, as i feel the pain
its the sharp sensation of drownig all over again.
chorus -
so take my hand, lead me astray.
From the darkest nightmares that just wont go away.
Close my eyes, and cease thd pain.
The pain of knowing that I wont wake up again.
I scream as the blood runs down my arm.
I can't be still, i can't remain calm.
There's just so many shadows of hate lurking around.
Just wanna make them drown......just wanna smash them in the face.......
coda -
oh, i shut the windows and close the doors.
But, its the morbid fury that has come back for more.....
chorus -
so take my hand, lead me astray.
From the darkest nightmares that just wont go away.
Close my eyes, and cease thd pain.
The pain of knowing that I wont wake up again.
Just take my hand, lead me astray....
just help me get out of today.
The one who sits in the corner
and dries away her tears.
The one who is showed by the blood
of all who've failed before her.
And if we listen
we can hear her crying.
And if we listen
we can hear her dying.
The one drowned by the pain
the showered crimson tears she's shed.
The razor-like soul that gelntly cuts away
all of the pain that's been fed.
And if we listen
we can hear her crying.
And if we listen
we can haer her dying.
Somewhere
in this filthy dust of life.
We'll find the hope
hidden against the night.
And if we listen
we can hear her crying.
and deep inside
we can hear her dying.
I can't breathe
1
Shattered fragments
of a razor-like mind.
Searching for a soul
that I can call mine.
2
I see the hope
but i can find the sign.
The triumph of a heart
is all i want to find.
chorus-
So i bleed
over and over again.
I can breathe
i just don't understand.
why i'm tearing myself, tearing myself apart.
I can't breathe. I just can't breathe.
3
The whispered voices
in a shaddow much like mine.
Lingers above me
like a tale as old as time.
4
I hear your voice, i call your name
but I can't find.
The soul inside me
that's taking over my mind....
chorus-
So i bleed
over and over again.
I can't breathe
i just don't understand.
why i'm tearing myself, tearing myself apart.
I can't breathe. I just can't breathe.
Oh, there's a triumph in my heart
that i just can't let out.
I'm afraid it'll go away, that it will go away.
There's a song that wants to be free
like a bird within my soul.
A bird within my soul,
that wants to let go....
chorus-
So i bleed
over and over again.
I can breathe
i just don't understand.
why i'm tearing myself, tearing myself apart.
I can't breathe. I just can't breathe.
So i bleed
over and over again.
I fall on my knees
i just don't understand.
why i'm tearing myself, tearing myself apart.
I can't breathe. I just can't breathe.
Oh, i can't breathe.
Wow kaylan u just dont stop writing poetry/song do u? U're like a machine! [img]http://s3.images.proboards.com/tongue.gif" alt=":P" border="0"/>
lol, I guese not.
I just have all these thoughts that I have to write down and share with everybody, plus there's the fact that I'm in a band and most of my songs are used and my poetry is turned into songs. [img]http://s3.images.proboards.com/grin.gif" alt=";D" border="0"/>
You're too kind!
just a song [img]http://s3.images.proboards.com/wink.gif" alt=";)" border="0"/>
Into the Darkness
1
Blood pumping
fueling the engine
the engine that was birthed from the seed.
2
The seed that
is tuturing my life,
its all around me that I cannot breathe.
coda
Because I'm not perfect
I never came from a seed.
Just so inperfect
but you cannot see...
chorus
I'm falling into the darkness
oh how can I breathe?
Just so wrapped in pretence
that I cannot see
(I cannot see)
Oh save my soul, keep it
wrapped up in your heart.
So immobilised in insanity
that I cannot breathe
(I cannot breathe)
3
Now that
the core of my heart
is shown for all to see.
4
There's no where
to hide from secrets
which are all about me.
coda
Because I'm not perfect
I never came from a seed.
Just so inperfect
but you cannot see...
chorus
I'm falling into the darkness
oh how can I breathe?
Just so wrapped in pretence
that I cannot see
(I cannot see)
Oh save my soul, keep it
wrapped up in your heart.
So immobilised in insanity
that I cannot breathe
(I cannot breathe)
Oh no where to go, oh no where to go
(so wrapped in ignorence)
I'm lost in the snow, I'm lost in the snow
(i'm suffocating in my mind)
I'm lost but you can't find me
I'm seen but you can't hear me
I'm feared but you can't feel me
you can't feel me
chorus
I'm falling into the darkness
oh how can I breathe?
Just so wrapped in pretence
that I cannot see
(I cannot see)
Oh save my soul, keep it
wrapped up in your heart.
So immobilised in insanity
that I cannot breathe
(I cannot breathe)
wow its great that u can just let the words rush out like that *stands back in awe* hehe