End of Paragraph beginning "Mum took Emily..." the word stops at b
First sentence, My should be my
First sentence is way long and somewhat difficult to grasp. Perhaps cut it into two or three sentences.
Starting sentences with 'And'. In a couple of places this makes the sentence sound a little odd. It would sound better if it were dialogue, but as it is narrative its a bit off putting.
The 'fencing' sentence is another one that seems too long and confusing.
“I’m not and they’re my clothes so if anyone’s a stealer its YOU, princess smelly!”
it's not its
Hope that helps a little and doesn't sounds too harsh.
As for a name... Amy, Rachel, Rebecca, Lisa???????