Tyvm deb.
I hate real life, hate it. Not just cause it's evil, but because of the people in it. Why do people have ot be so complicated? GRRRRRRRRR
Anyways, have some tortured poems.
Save Me
I’m in a crowded room
Filled with people passing through,
But they don’t see me,
No they don’t need me.
I feel a tear slip down my cheek,
All because I’m not what they seek,
They don’t hear me,
They won’t go near me.
I scream aloud,
At my thoughts whirling ‘round,
But they don’t stop,
No they won’t stop.
I’m sinking to the ground,
Without a sound,
Someone save me,
Someone, stay with me,
Please, love me.
Give Me Words
In a world filled,
With silent meaning,
And blatant actions,
Give me words.
In a world where,
Silence is golden,
And talk is cheap,
Give me words.
In a world of,
Meaningless chatter,
And borrowed phrases,
Give me your words.
In this world now,
I need to hear your need,
Your care and love,
So please, give me your words.
I like the first one better. What do you guys think?
Mystic Ward
11 years ago
Mystic Ward
Twentyfamilies Gypsy
I like, especially give me your words.
TY so much guys! writing these AND hearing that the poems are liked... helps make me feel a little better. So thank you.
I love the rhythm of Save Me, but I'm with Deb, I think Give Me Your Words hits home more. Both are beautiful, and I hope you feel happier soon.
I already do, Darga. :) Ty.
I really like 'give me words' and I hope you're feeling better soon and because I believe a hug a day keeps demons away *hug*
11 years ago
Fri Mar 29 2013, 09:15am
Thanks so much, guys! I'm actually feeling alot happier. I've also written stuff! It's not exactly happy stuff, but honestly, i am happy lol.
Away
I’m slipping away,
From every word you said,
When you tried to make it okay.
I’m falling away,
From every memory made,
I’m sorry to say –
I’ve gone away,
I could not stay,
Because I’ve lost it all today.
Your Name Is On My Heart
Once upon a time,
My name was written on your heart,
Your name was on mine too,
But somehow along the way,
My name was erased.
You didn’t even tell me,
You just walked away.
Now I’m sitting on the floor,
Trying to figure out,
What I did wrong.
I tried to reach out for you,
But you were gone.
Now your name is on my heart,
And I’m trying,
To make it disappear,
But it won’t go,
No, it won’t leave me alone.
I keep hoping you’ll come back around,
And I won’t have to,
Lose your name,
But all I’m hearing ‘bout these days,
Is you’ve moved on,
And I’m all wrong.
I can’t reach out for you,
‘cause you’re long gone.
Now your name is still on my heart,
And I’m trying,
To make it disappear,
But it won’t go,
No, it won’t leave me alone.
I’m try to run away,
I’m trying to leave it all behind,
But I can’t lose my heart,
It just won't part.
‘Cause your name is written on my heart,
And though I’m trying,
To make it disappear,
It won’t go,
No, it won’t leave me alone.
Please leave me alone.
(Please don’t go)
Once upon a time,
My name was written on your heart,
Your name was on mine too,
But somehow along the way,
My name was erased.
What do you guys think?
The Girl with Words in Her Head
The girl with words in her head,
Stays up all night,
Crying in her bed,
Wishing she could disappear from sight.
The girl with words in her head,
Is tired of the light,
Still she never says,
“I’m done with this fight.â€
The girl with words in her head,
Never fears the heights,
Knowing any day she might be dead,
She hurls herself with all her might.
The girl with words in her head,
Just wants to be held tight.
The girl with words in her head,
Just wants to know she’ll be all right.
God that's the way I feel right now. Beautifully written. *hugs* :(
I love 'Away' Dakosha - short, but so powerful. And oh, 'Once upon a time, My name was written on your heart'. Beautiful!
I think my favourite is the Girl with Words in Her Head, though. I love that concept that someone feels powerless for whatever reason - alienation from friends, perhaps illness, perhaps some family situation - but she is making a meaning for herself in her head and so is able to hold on and keep going, and wait for someone to help her bear everything.
Love your work as always.
11 years ago
Wed Apr 03 2013, 01:15am
Thanks so so so much guys. "The Girl With Words in Her Head" is very... personal, because i feel like that alot of times. I'm so glad you guys like it. :) Thanks for the hug Loren!
Thanks for reading.
Here's a couple new poems, both untitled. IT's a very different rhythm/pattern for me, so i hope you guys like it.
Dreams and wishes have been broken and shattered,
Until there is no more hope to glue them back together,
No strength left to make another,
Turning to dust as you fall from the sky,
Wishing you could return to the heights,
Of the happy moment that left you in pieces -
Please don’t forget how it feels,
To be embraced,
And loved.
The mistakes have piled up outside your door,
With little notes attached, saying you were wrong –
They forgave you, but then they forgot you,
Now you’re running away,
To a life filled,
With loss and pain,
Overwhelmed by loneliness,
Eventually you’ll find the door,
To Sweet Nothingness.
Any ideas for titles?
I'm no help with titles, but lovely poems :P
Mystic Ward
11 years ago
Mystic Ward
Twentyfamilies Gypsy
Why do they need titles anyway? :P
Titles do make it a little easier for the rest of us to refer to a particular one, though we *could* just quote everything and avoid confusion that way I suppose.
LOL, ya, i'm not sure these ones need titles. In fact, in Word, i labeled them "Untitled Ones." However, if anyone comes up with a fiting title, pls let me know. :)
Glad to see you back Thalia!! I've missed you!!!!!
I was going to wait to post this poem, but i guess i can now.
Had Enough
Something is wrong,
When the sun feels too bright,
After a winter so long –
Yet still, you wish it was night.
You wait for the sun to disappear,
So the moon can shine its searching light,
On you, as you cry for a listening ear,
To understand how this pain devours all your might.
But wishes and dreams,
Have strayed too far from sight,
You’ve lost it all to what seems,
To be a bitter remembrance of heights –
The falls – Mistakes made,
When you lost the fight,
Because you received no aid,
Now you’re done holding on tight,
To this life once full of love-
You’ve finally had enough.
So, what do you guys think? i wrote it awhile ago... i'm so happy, it rhymes! lol
I'm hopeless at titles too :). What I love most about those earlier ones is how you start off with long sentences and elaborate concepts and then get simpler and shorter until you're back to the fundamentals - love, nothingness. So effective!
And - ha ha, a rhyming poem. I like it.
I like the final lines of "Had Enough"
It seems decisive; a decision has been made and now things are going to change.
I have a document called 'snippets' in my writing folder; its essentially all the little nameless pieces. I will admit for names in the past I have used a thesarus and found a more exotic synonym for a main theme/word of the piece. (eg an opening line "an ill wind blows" got the title 'Sirocco' a word meaning dust- or sand-carrying windstorm)
Huh, that is way cool!! i'll have to try that, ty!!
To Fight –
Is not to win,
Nor is it to die.
Instead it is to never give up on hope,
And to always hold on to life.
To try your hardest,
Through tears, pain, and the rain.
To run,
Towards the battle.
To love,
With all your heart.
To fight,
Not out of fear,
Or hate,
But out of hope,
And want,
And love.
To fight,
Not to kill,
But to live.
So simple but so beautiful!